Combine like concepts

Before

The formula the FCC uses to calculate universal service fund subsidies is in flux. In November 2007, the Federal-State Joint Board on Universal Service recommended that the FCC address the long-term reform issues facing the high-cost universal service support system and make fundamental revisions in the structure of existing universal service mechanisms. These recommendations were accompanied by some specific proposals.

Before, with commentary

The formula the FCC uses to calculate universal service fund subsidies is in flux. In November 2007, the Federal-State Joint Board on Universal Service recommended that the FCC address the long-term reform issues facing the high-cost universal service support system and make fundamental revisions in the structure of existing universal service mechanisms. These recommendations were accompanied by some specific proposals. [We can combine these ideas. The paragraph is hard enough to read without making it longer than necessary!]

After

The formula the FCC uses to calculate universal service fund subsidies is in flux. In November 2007, the Federal-State Joint Board on Universal Service offered some proposals to the FCC to address the long-term reform issues facing the high-cost universal service support system and to make fundamental revisions in the structure of existing universal service mechanisms.