Avoid “respectively”


Ms. Baker received salary, bonus, and deferred compensation in the amounts of $1.1 million, $3.1 million, and $1.4 million, respectively.

Before, with commentary

Why should your reader have to match up the compensation category with the amount? My version is easier to follow and shorter.


Ms. Baker received a salary of $1.1 million, a bonus of $3.1 million, and deferred compensation of $1.4 million.